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High school student expelled for short story

From The Globe and Mail:

A 17-year-old student has been expelled from his Brampton, Ont., high school for a fictional essay he submitted in a creative writing class about a disgruntled student who murders one of her teachers.

Brendan Jones, a Grade 12 student at Heart Lake Secondary School northwest of Toronto, was expelled last week, leaving him facing an uncertain future. Brendan is just three credits shy of graduating from high school and was hoping to study criminology at university next fall. But it is not at all clear whether he will be able to transfer to another high school in the province.

[…]
The five-page, handwritten essay, entitled “School’s Out,” is narrated by an unnamed Grade 10 student who stresses that she likes all of her teachers with the notable exception of Mr. Adams, who teaches science and has an “intoxicating odor.” The controversial part of the story happens near the end when the student manages to trap the teacher in the basement of her house, picks up a bat and gives him “some final words.” It ends ominously with: “Sorry, Mr. Adams, but schools [sic] out!”

Brendan said in an interview that he never imagined the essay would provoke such a reaction. He said there is nothing gory in it and the characters are fictitious. He has also written a letter of apology to both the school and the Peel Board of Education.

As if this weren’t strange enough, here’s the kicker:

The essay is sprinkled with comments from the creative writing teacher, including “show, don’t tell,” and “cliché.” But by the time the teacher got to the end of the essay, alarm bells appear to have gone off. She scrawled “inappropriate subject matter!” but she also tells him to work on his sentence structure and dialogue. There is no grade on the essay.

[Emphasis added.]

18 Responses to “High school student expelled for short story”

  1. Rob in Victoria says:

    I don’t know where to begin…

  2. Mark Luk says:

    What an appalling lack of common sense.

  3. selina says:

    That’ll learn ya to be creative, Brendan!

  4. Jeff Z says:

    I think the school has seriously overreacted. Personally I would like to read the essay, however I was lead to believe it was posted on the CityTV website but I have not been able to find it.

    Seems to me that people have this paranoia that everyone and their mother are going to walk into a school and just starting shooting people.

    It is a shame that we live in a society now where a person’s freedom of speech/expression is now violated.

  5. anon says:

    The expulsion may have been excessive, but if I were a teacher at that school, I’d be a little nervous. A suspension would definitely be appropriate.

  6. Brendan Jones says:

    As of right now, i’m still sitting at home, with no school to go to tomorrow. They told me that it’s not in my, nor the school’s best interest to have me ever return to Heart Lake. They told us that i’m neither suspended or expelled, but merely “excluded” for a time frame that i’m unaware of.

  7. Quillblog » Fiction-writing high school student not expelled, but not back in school says:

    […] was threatened with expulsion after writing a violent-themed story as part of a test, has posted a comment on the original Quillblog post about this story to give us an update: “As of right now, i’m […]

  8. Nicole Ross says:

    I’m just reminded of the Virginia Tech Massacre that happened in 2007. Alot of reports mentioned his short stories about grusome murders, and how they should have been a warning signal to the school that the student was a threat. I remember hearing one of his stories and thinking that it wasn’t half as bad as the scripts for any of the SAW movies. Those people are being payed tons of money to write sickening and twisted plots about torture and slow painful deaths. I don’t believe anyone is allowed to judge whether the decision was right or wrong unless they know the student personally and have read the full essay.

  9. samantha ! says:

    i think its really dumb that he got expelled.
    like seriously.
    (:
    that story has no gor in it. and he has the right to say what he wants.
    as a former student, i know that at school we cant do anything, so now if we cant alteast how our freedom of speech
    without getting into trouble, we have nothing, and that will cause more students to drop out (: i think that
    brendan should be allowed to go back , and finish his last year at Heart lake even if it means he has to get talked to by
    a counseller .

  10. Jamar says:

    Yeah so I wrote something like this……. I’m properly gonna get expelled

  11. High School Student Expelled For Short Story « Orbis Writings says:

    […] post info By Don Categories: interesting news and writing Tags: murder, news, school, short story, student expelled, writing This is a bit old news, but a 17 year old student was expelled for writing a controversial short story where a 10 years old student kills one of her teachers. See here for more. […]

  12. Troo says:

    Way to go, Toronto. Punishing a boy for writing creatively in a creative writing class.

    So congratulations. The capital city in a country that prides itself on tolerance and arts has shown itself up to be completely moronic. An embarrassement to all of Canada.

  13. cassandra says:

    in my experience, anyone who is going to admit that school frustrates them like this is very unlikely to actually do anything.
    if you’re going to shoot up the school, it’s not incredibly likely that you’re going to tell the teacher, /unless/ it’s a cry for help - wanting someone to listen to you.
    is it really that hard to figure out?

  14. carter says:

    Canada sucks

  15. sean Crowley says:

    I thought the states had this stuff cornered. My girl was expelled and we had cops called on us before we wee asked to leave. This happened at my girl’s private school near buffalo ny over some facebook remarks she and her friends made. They were creeped by the subject’s older sister and brough to schooo be her mommy who’s father oin law is a major donor to the school. Guess where that left us ?

    Read it if you have a strong stomach and like satire : justice4claire.blogspot.com

  16. Kelcie says:

    I am currently a university student in my third year, working towards my B.E.D. I came across this story looking for educational websites to use as links on a educational web task page I am creating for a high school English class.
    I find this story frustrating, as a person and an up coming educator, I can not believe that a teacher, that should be pushing their students to explore creative writing can take such offense to a piece of writing that fulfilled all of the requested requirements. There was no obscene use of vocabulary, or was the essay directed to one specific person. As a creative writer, and an English teacher you should know some of the best writers in history have created stories that have the power to stir us inside.
    I hope this can be resolved, the student being ridiculed sounds full of optimism and the desire to achieve. It saddens me to see the world so full of fear they cant actually open their eyes to talent, and give leeway to what inspires one. I am sure to everyone out there, there is something odd that inspires you, even though you would never attempt the act. This entire ordeal should be taken with a grain of salt. When teaching, one should be prepared to see the results of what is taught, but remember it is the results of what is being taught, that are expressed differently by each individual. When asked to create, the world should not ridicule the creator. Education is a right. The right to create and learn. We hinder that right, when we restrain the multiple types of creativity, and limit what can be created.

  17. Jodi Schneider says:

    They should have learned the first time. There was a case like this years ago, but i think it was a girl in middle school
    andi think the school got in a lot of trouble… There’s a documentary about it at the end of a movie called “KIDS IN AMERICA”.
    Brendan’s story sounds real interesting though… I’d love to read it.

  18. Greg Dodwell says:

    i know this kid personally and i know hes not a nut job i also know there were other stories written by the kids that
    involved killing or harming an individual and the fact that he got expelled for it is a joke! One girl wrote how she
    was drugged and kidnapped on a family trip and wrote about how she woke up with sperm everywhere
    and she didn’t know if she was raped and stuff like this, and there was nothing done to this girl no one asked
    if she was ok and no one thought she was messed up. In the story he writes it from a female point of view and
    second the teachers name was not specific and did not describe any of his teachers what so ever this is total
    bull shit if you ask me and i think the teachers of that school should feel horriable for the shit they have caused
    this kid

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